In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do thier shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays we are seeing a significant number of
shops
present in the neighbourhood shutting down since most buyers are going to either shopping centres or
malls
for buying various items.
According to
my opinion,
this
is harmful to society and I intend to highlight the same in
this
essay. These
malls
are set up by multinational corporations,
whereas
the local
shops
are set up by people who are often staying in the neighbourhood and struggling to bring food to their plates. These shopkeepers take hefty loans from banks for starting their own businesses, failure in payment of which penalises them.
This
shift in shopping trends is deteriorating the economy. The previous year my Uncle started his own business of making leather bags and selling them in local markets. He was unable to sell in any mall as neither the product's longevity was yet proven, nor he had a big name in
this
sector. Luckily five local
shops
agreed to be the retail sellers, but they ran out of business within a few months because of minimum footfall and these bags went back to a storage facility.
Additionally
, shopping centres are exploiting their staff with long working hours because of the unavailability of jobs, which can be checked when more vacancies are present. Had the leather business flourished in a better manner, the owner would have recruited a few more employees.
Moreover
, shopping
malls
tend to procure goods from wholesalers who are agreeing to sell at a cheaper rate, which may not be a local producer. The closure of local
shops
is affecting local production units too.
To conclude
, I believe Governments must take steps to ensure local stores flourish alongside other large shopping
malls
. Subsidies for tax and utility bills need to be given for minimising their expenditure.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economies of scale
  • local economy
  • unique local products
  • sense of community
  • local culture and identity
  • job opportunities
  • environmental footprint
  • time-efficient
  • social hubs
  • convenient
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