The diagram below shows how the instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how the instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The process diagram illustrates
step by step
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approaches
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instant nodules are produced.
Overall
, there are eight steps beginning with the storage in silos of
flour
delivered by lorries and ending with
packaging
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the packaging
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of instant
noodles
.
This
packaged food is made of mainly five ingredients, namely,
flour
, water, oil, vegetables and spices. Looking at the first five stages of the manufacturing process,
flour
, after having been delivered to storage silos by lorries, is transported to a mixer where it is stirred with water and oil.
This
mixture is
then
transformed into dough sheets by rollers, followed by cutting in dough strips, which are eventually converted into circular discs. Taking into consideration of the following steps,
firstly
, the
noodles
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discs are cooked in oil, and
after
this
, they are dried.
Then
, the dried stacks of
noodles
are put in assembled cups where vegetables and spices are added. These cups are labelled and sealed afterwards, ending the manufacturing process.
This
is how, instant
noodles
are produced in eight steps, starting with
flour
delivery by trucks, and finishing with the
noodles
being packed in labelled and sealed cups.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words flour, noodles with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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