The diagram below shows how the instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The process diagram illustrates
step by step
approaches Add a hyphen
step-by-step
how
instant nodules are produced.
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to how
Overall
, there are eight steps beginning with the storage in silos of Linking Words
flour
delivered by lorries and ending with Use synonyms
packaging
of instant Add an article
the packaging
noodles
. Use synonyms
This
packaged food is made of mainly five ingredients, namely, Linking Words
flour
, water, oil, vegetables and spices.
Looking at the first five stages of the manufacturing process, Use synonyms
flour
, after having been delivered to storage silos by lorries, is transported to a mixer where it is stirred with water and oil. Use synonyms
This
mixture is Linking Words
then
transformed into dough sheets by rollers, followed by cutting in dough strips, which are eventually converted into circular discs.
Taking into consideration of the following steps, Linking Words
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, the Linking Words
Use synonyms
noodles
discs are cooked in oil, and Fix the agreement mistake
noodle
after
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this
, they are dried. Linking Words
Then
, the dried stacks of Linking Words
noodles
are put in assembled cups where vegetables and spices are added. These cups are labelled and sealed afterwards, ending the manufacturing process. Use synonyms
This
is how, instant Linking Words
noodles
are produced in eight steps, starting with Use synonyms
flour
delivery by trucks, and finishing with the Use synonyms
noodles
being packed in labelled and sealed cups.Use synonyms
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