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Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.

#people #risks
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Everyone wants to be successful. Some
people
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 believe that
people
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 can be successful by doing the same
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,
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 others argue that success comes from trying new
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 and taking on risky
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. I personally believe that
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 who are open to innovation and risky
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 are successful. I feel
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 way for a number of reasons, and I am going to explore them in the subsequent paragraphs.
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 with, taking risky
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 and trying new
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 is always interesting. If
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 does the every day same
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,
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 becomes tiring and exhausting.
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, I am working for a company since my graduation, and my main task is not different each month. I repeat the same task every day,
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 I feel I do not have to learn anything new in
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 company. I think it is time to change my company and spill some light on my life.
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trying new
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 makes
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 learn new
skills
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 which leads him to be successful. A person who repeats similar
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 cannot learn new
skills
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.
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, he will have fears to try new
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, and he will afraid of failing. A human who does his best to try new
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 will gain new experiences and will be successful in the future.
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, if
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 does not try novel
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 and risky decisions will stay in his comfort zone.
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, a person who seeks innovation and has the courage to take risks will always be in search of new opportunities and new solutions for any problems of the world. If you are stuck on
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 thing, you will never be successful.
People
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 should keep trying, and
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 day they will be successful for sure.
To sum up
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, what I have mentioned above, we can safely draw a conclusion that successful
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 embrace new
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 and risks.
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 is because taking risks and trying new
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 is not only interesting but
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 helps
people
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 to confront new experiences and new opportunities.
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