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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came form and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came form and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The given table
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 data about the police
budget
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 for 2017 and 2018 in Ireland,Italy,Spain,Sweden and Turkey. Looking at the graph as a whole,
the
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food
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,
drinks
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 and
tobacco
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 is the most spent money in
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 countries.As you can see, the lowest spend money on leisure and education in five
countires
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countries
counties
. In detail,the
food
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,
drinks
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 and
tobacco
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 in Turkey most spend at 32.14% public
dubget
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budget
,and
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 the proportion of
food
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,
drinks
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 and
tobacco
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 most spent at 28.91% in Ireland.The rate of spend
food
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,
drinks
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 and
tobacco
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 different
around
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 14% between
in
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Turkey and in Sweden.
The leisure
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 and education
is
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 the lowest spend
pulice
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police
budget
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 at 1.98% in Spain.In
adition
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addition
,the proportion of
budget
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 at 5.40% in Sweden is the lowest
the
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each
countries
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country
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.
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,the proportion of
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budget
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the budget
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are
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is
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 different
around
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 more than 20%
from
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for
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food
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,
drinks
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 and
tobacco
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 to leisure and
eduction
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education
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 in all
countires
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countries
,
then
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 the rate of
boudget
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budget
 different
about
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 more than 5% between clothing and footwear in Ireland,Italy and Spain.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, food, drinks, tobacco with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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