The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came form and the charts show how it was distributed.

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The given table

give

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data about the police

budget

for 2017 and 2018 in Ireland,Italy,Spain,Sweden and Turkey. Looking at the graph as a whole,

the

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apply

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food

drinks

and

tobacco

is the most spent money in

there

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countries.As you can see, the lowest spend money on leisure and education in five

countires

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countries

counties

. In detail,the

food

drinks

and

tobacco

in Turkey most spend at 32.14% public

dubget

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budget

,and

also

the proportion of

food

drinks

and

tobacco

most spent at 28.91% in Ireland.The rate of spend

food

drinks

and

tobacco

different

around

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by around

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14% between

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apply

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Turkey and in Sweden.

The leisure

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Leisure

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and education

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are

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the lowest spend

pulice

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police

budget

at 1.98% in Spain.In

adition

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addition

,the proportion of

budget

at 5.40% in Sweden is the lowest

the

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apply

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each

countries

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country

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Moreover

,the proportion of

budget

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the budget

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are

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different

around

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from

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more than 20%

from

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for

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food

drinks

and

tobacco

to leisure and

eduction

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education

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in all

countires

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countries

then

the rate of

boudget

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budget

different

about

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from

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more than 5% between clothing and footwear in Ireland,Italy and Spain.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, food, drinks, tobacco with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came form and the charts show how it was distributed.

In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this?How can people research this?

Some people think that wearing uniforms fosters solidarity between staff and makes them feel part of a team. Others claim that it is better to have a dress code than a uniform. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory in high school programmes (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that individuals do no protect cannot make difference, others say that individuals can protect environment.Discuss both views and give your opinion.