The charts below give information about attendance at Australian entertainment venus and admission prices to those venues in 2009.

The charts below give information about attendance at Australian entertainment venus and admission prices to those venues in 2009.
The given charts illustrate
about
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the number of people who went to the three different
entertainment
venues in Australia,
their
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and their
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corresponding
ticket
prices per person or family in seven
entertainment
categories in
year
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2009.
Overall
, the
cinemas
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cinema
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is the most visited place among the three
entertainment
in
Autralia
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Australia
which had the highest number in
year
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the year
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2009,
while
the least in sports.
This
category as well registered the
most
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cheapest
ticket
sale for a single entry or in a group in that year. In 2009,
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the cinemas
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cinemas
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cinemas'
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figure
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rose exponentially as many
Ausee
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users
enjoy watching movies, rising to just above 1000. Far behind theme parks, unlike
cinemas
, just above quarter went for enjoyment.
On the other hand
, sports are the least
favorite
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type of fun which accumulated only an estimated 180.
Furthermore
, the second chart presents four of the seven
entertainment
events: football
Game
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Games
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- (AFL,NRL, NRU) and theme parks are the most expensive admission prices per person or a family group approximately between 70$-75$ per
ticket
and 210$-298$ per family
ticket
(for four people) in the given period. Trail behind Basketball at 34% (1
ticket
) and 80$ ( for family), and Cricket game with
sale
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a sale
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price for each
ticket
( 24$) and family (80$).
Cinemas
demonstrate
a
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competitive
prices
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which
is
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the cheapest compared to other fun events, a significant 15$ per
ticket
and for a group of four at 55$.
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