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some people think that public health is responsible of the government while others think that individuals are responsible for their health Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

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The bar graph illustrates information about the
number
 of people who go to the cinemas on different days in a certain European country.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that a majority of individuals attend cinemas on
Saturday
while
 a minor goes on Mondays. In 2003, a few
community
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communities
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 attended cinemas. The figures stood between 10 and 20 until midweek. From there, they increased from Thursday until they reached a peak of about 40 on
Saturday
 and dropped again. After 2
years
, the
number
 of individuals going to
such
 shows increased on Monday,Wednesday, Sunday and
Saturday
 by 10% which was the highest in all
years
. Coming to 2007,the figures reduced on Monday , Wednesday,
Saturday
 and on Sunday as compared to the previous 2
years
. In all
years
 under review, on Friday, the numbers remained constant at 30 per cent. In comparison, in 2005 the
number
 of people increased on Monday, Wednesday , and
Saturday
 but decreased in 2007 on the same days.
OnWednesdays
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On Wednesdays
 there was a decreasing trend. From 2003 the
number
 of people visiting the cinema dropped from about 17% to 7%.
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