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Some people suggest that it is better for children to be brought up the whole family including uncles, aunts and grandparents, rather than just the parents. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #children #uncles #aunts #grandparents #parents
Many people believe that
life
 for
children
together with
 uncles, aunts, and grandparents,
however
, others' opinion
life
 only with the
parents
. I totally agree with
this
 both given arguments. On the one hand,
children'
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children's
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life
 with distance relationships may be
more
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better
then
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than
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 without them. They can
halp
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help
parents
for
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to
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 look
after
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themafter
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.
For example
,
uncle
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an uncle
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 or
aut
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aunt
 is work as a teacher. In school years for
child
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a child
the child
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 may be very
difficultly
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difficult
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. That time, his or her family members play a big role.
Furthermore
, In grandparents have many experiments to explore the rules in
the
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apply
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life
. They know which way correctly for
child
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a child
the child
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, and, if at one home live many people, will be a lot of different ideas for
future
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the future
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 of
child
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the child
a child
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.
After
this
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,this
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this
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apply
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child
 can respect others, and
this
 depends on the family environment.
On the other hand
, there are a number of
children
 who want to live only with
parents
, sisters and brothers. It is more comfortable for
child
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a child
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live
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to live
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in
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an
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 independent
life
.
For example
, when the
child
 has problems, he or she
try
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 find solutions.
This
 is because
,
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apply
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 they think no one without
yourself
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themselves
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 cannot
halp
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help
 in
this
 situation.
Moreover
,
at
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in
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 the
statistics
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,statistics
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 you can see that
children
 who live in a small family
more
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are more
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 independent
then
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than
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who
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those who
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 live in a big family. if
parents
 give good education to their
children
, these arguments do not play
role
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a role
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for
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in
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character
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the character
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 of the
child
.
To conclude
, in my opinion
for
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apply
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children
 live with their uncles, aunts
grandparents
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and grandparents
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 and without
they
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them they
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 may be useful and comfortable.
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