Some people suggest that it is better for children to be brought up the whole family including uncles, aunts and grandparents, rather than just the parents. Do you agree or disagree?
Many people believe that
life
for children
together with
uncles, aunts, and grandparents, however
, others' opinion life
only with the parents
. I totally agree with this
both given arguments.
On the one hand, children'
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children's
life
with distance relationships may be more
better Change the word
apply
then
without them. They can Replace the word
than
halp
Correct your spelling
help
parents
for
look Change preposition
to
after
. Correct pronoun usage
themafter
For example
, uncle
or Correct article usage
an uncle
aut
is work as a teacher. In school years for Correct your spelling
aunt
child
may be very Add an article
a child
the child
difficultly
. That time, his or her family members play a big role. Change the word
difficult
Furthermore
, In grandparents have many experiments to explore the rules in the
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apply
life
. They know which way correctly for child
, and, if at one home live many people, will be a lot of different ideas for Add an article
a child
the child
future
of Correct article usage
the future
child
. Add an article
the child
a child
After
this
Add a comma
,this
this
Remove the redundancy
apply
child
can respect others, and this
depends on the family environment.
On the other hand
, there are a number of children
who want to live only with parents
, sisters and brothers. It is more comfortable for child
Correct article usage
a child
live
Fix the infinitive
to live
in
independent Correct your spelling
an
life
. For example
, when the child
has problems, he or she try
find solutions. Add the particle
totry
This
is because,
they think no one without Remove the comma
apply
yourself
cannot Correct pronoun usage
themselves
halp
in Correct your spelling
help
this
situation. Moreover
, at
the Change preposition
in
statistics
you can see that Add a comma
,statistics
children
who live in a small family more
independent Add a missing verb
are more
then
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than
who
live in a big family. if Correct pronoun usage
those who
parents
give good education to their children
, these arguments do not play role
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a role
the role
for
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in
character
of the Add an article
the character
child
.
To conclude
, in my opinion for
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apply
children
live with their uncles, aunts grandparents
and without Correct word choice
and grandparents
they
may be useful and comfortable.Correct pronoun usage
them they
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