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The tables below give information about the amount of exports (millions of tonnes) moving through Rotterdam port in Holland to various global destinations in 2002 and 2012; and also, the % rates of tax imposed on these exports by the receiving countries.

The tables below give information about the amount of exports (millions of tonnes) moving through Rotterdam port in Holland to various global destinations in 2002 and 2012; and also, the % rates of tax imposed on these exports by the receiving countries.
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 of exports being transported through Rotterdam over a ten-year period, and the level of taxation imposed on the goods at
destination
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the destination
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. Regarding the
volumes
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, total exports increased slightly, reaching 18,600
million
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 tonnes by 2012. Within
this
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 total,
however
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, most
zones
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 declined in volume.
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, Europe – the largest destination – declined from 6,900
million
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 to 6,400
million
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, and the USA – the second highest – went down by roughly 10% to 3,900
million
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. China dipped slightly to 2,300
million
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, and Latin America dropped from 1,800 to 1,500
million
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. The ‘other’
zones
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 remained static at 350
million
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. By marked contrast,
volumes
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 to Asia Pacific and Australasia more than trebled, hitting 2,550 and 2,300
million
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 tonnes respectively. Turning to taxation, we see that
tax
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 increased considerably in all the
zones
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 that showed a decline in
volumes
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, reaching 2% in the USA, China and Latin America, and rising from 5% to 8% in Europe. The ‘other’
zones
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 kept
tax
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 stable at 2%,
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 the growth
zones
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 reduced
tax
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 massively, from 5% to 2% in Asia Pacific and a fourfold decrease to 1% in Australasia. In summary, the decade showed a clear connection between increased export
volumes
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 and reduced levels of
tax
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words volumes, million, zones, tax with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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