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Online education is becoming increasingly popular. Many students are choosing to study online instead of face - to - face education. what is the advantages and disadvantages

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It has been argued by many individuals that in
this
 modern era, online study is proliferating regularly and is famous among
students
 who are joining
to
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education online despite
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person-to-person interaction. I shall come up with constructive and destructive repercussions of
this
 phenomenon in the subsequent paragraphs
along with
 a reasoned conclusion. Foremost, the prominent merit of studying online than eye-to-eye education is that learners might save
their
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time
which
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they consume on ready for school and waste
time
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distance
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that
time
 they may
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learn new topics and extra knowledge from educational institutes.
For instance
, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that 76% of the tutees have been preferring to choose online classes rather than face-to-face as they wanted to save their precious
time
.
Besides
this
, sometimes when
students
 do not have
time
 to join lectures, they could record all the conversation and after done
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 they can hear and write
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. Paradoxically, the fundamental demerit of learning from
online
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platform
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 is that mentees might suffer from health ailments. Once
students
more
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use
of
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electronic gadgets
such
 as laptops, computers, and smartphones
for
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academic
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 field, they can face major
problem
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weak
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 eyesight because
that
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 emit blue raises which
directectly
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directly
 affect on eyes and the other hurdles that may involve in their life like obesity
as well as
 back pain.
In addition
, scholars will not have fear of mentors because they do not give punishment
to
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them by handphones or
the
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another devices
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.
Consequently
, they do not focus on
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.
Hence
, it puts an adverse impact on children's upcoming
time
.
To conclude
,
although
 there are some advantages undergraduate could save their
time
 and put on record classes, there are a few disadvantages to
students
 who may take health illnesses and will not emphasise
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education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Remote learning
  • Virtual classroom
  • Distance education
  • E-learning platforms
  • Synchronous vs asynchronous learning
  • Self-paced study
  • Blended learning
  • Digital divide
  • Time management skills
  • Interactive tools and resources
  • Accreditation and recognition
  • Student engagement
  • Motivation and discipline
  • Technical requirements
  • Cost savings
  • Social interaction
  • Connectivity issues
  • Practical experience
  • Networking opportunities
  • Individualized learning paths
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