The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The line graph illustrates the rate of attendance
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Caribbean
island
by
tourists
over a period of 7 years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there is a noticeable increase in
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the general
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visiting
island
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. The number of
tourists
choosing to stay on a cruise ship or on the
island
show
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considerable growth as well. In 2010, the figure for visitors who preferred to stay on cruise ships was approximately 250000, but
then
experienced fluctuations by 2013 and,
finally
, increased to
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million
attendance rate by 2017. Meanwhile, the number of
tourists
staying on
island
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the island
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started at just over 700000 in 2010 followed by a gradual rise to 1,5
million
visitors by 2015. Afterwards, the figure saw a slight decline in 2016
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but
then
rose back to 1, 5
million
visitors by 2017.
Total
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number of
tourists
stood at 1
million
in 2010
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but
then
showed a sharp jump in attendance
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island
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the island
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and stood at about 2,7
million
tourists
. The rate stayed the same until 2016
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but
then
witnessed a remarkable rise to 3,5
million
tourists
by 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, tourists, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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