The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs provide information about the changes in the possession of electronic devices and the time dedicated to
do
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housework
in
particular
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country over the period of 100 years. As can be seen from the graphs, the number of electronic equipment,
such
as washing machines, refrigerators, and vacuum cleaners, experienced a significant growth that,
hence
, led to the reduction of time needed for
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the household
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household
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. Regarding the first graph, the refrigerator was not used at all compared to other appliances in 1920, at 0%.
However
, it saw a considerable increase and reached a peak, like
a
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usage of vacuum cleaners, of 100% by 2019. It is notable that the washing machine was the most
demanded
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in 1920
stood
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at 40%
households
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and
then
saw a gradual rise to 70% by 2019,
that
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makes it the least used among others. Vacuum cleaner had a steady rise starting at 30% and ending up at 100%.
According to
the second graph,
while
ownership of electronic devices
leaped
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, the hours for doing daily
chored
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chores
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had a remarkable decline. It was 50 hours per week in 1920
,
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but
then
plunged to only 10 hours per week.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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