Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
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golden age of the internet, it is generally
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that there are more and more users
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to buy things online. From my perspective, in spite of a clear drawback, the benefit of shopping online
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undeniable and considered to be
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greater. On the one hand, the most significant problem during shopping online time is whether those networking sites are reliable. In detail, if consumers choose the wrong ones, there will be some issues
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relating to leaking their personal
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such
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as bank accounts, addresses or
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phone numbers.
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, it will be
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concern
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the quality of the products. Users just have a look
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them through images and can not touch them directly, leading to the ability of
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.
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, I am more convinced that the advantage offered by shopping on the Internet is more substantial than its downside. To be more specific, there are several apps and websites
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as Shopee, Lazada and Tiki that offer online shopping
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far away to buy something, consumers just need to stay at home and click a few buttons,
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wide range of that products will be displayed on
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, it is more convenient for people to compare their prices, trustworthy sources or models before deciding
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put them into the basket or not.
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, users will save more time to do other things. Taking everything into account,
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shopping online has
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disadvantage, I
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truly
believe that its benefits should be more considerable
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its convenience.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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