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People should be at least 21 years old before they're allowed to drive a car. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days more and more
people
 are opting to travel by
car
 for a quick commute to their work or college.
This
 has increased the cases of rash driving resulting in
road
accidents
. Will increasing the
age
 of starting to drive a
car
 have an effect on
road
 mishaps? In my opinion,
although
 increasing the
age
 to start driving may reduce unfortunate
road
 mishaps, many
people
 will be negatively affected by
this
. A large number of
people
 like to travel to college or places of work by
car
. Increasing the
age
limit
 will directly affect these
people
 as they will have difficulty finding public transport during common office hours. I,
for example
, prefer taking my personal
car
 to the office, which helps me reach on time and allows me to avoid huge traffic as I can leave at my preferred time.
While
 I do believe that increasing the
age
 to drive a
car
 might result in lesser
road
accidents
, the disadvantages of
this
 outweigh the advantages. Increasing the
age
limit
 will not necessarily reduce
accidents
 as it is not the only cause for it. There are several other reasons why
accidents
 may occur. Setting an
age
limit
 will only adversely affect the students/teachers who have to travel almost daily to colleges/universities.
For example
, my sister has an early morning lecture scheduled so she cannot wait for public transport. The unplanned strikes of public transport
also
 make it difficult for the
people
 travelling daily.
This
 only adds to the level of frustration of the
people
.
To sum up
, the increase in the
age
limit
 to start driving will not only bring inconvenience to a large group of
people
, but it will
also
 create discomfort and add to frustration for many
people
.
Submitted by Shweta on

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