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bar chart indicates how people of three different generations 18-34 years old, 35-54 years old and over 55 years old react when they move to other countries. Research options are Learning a new

language

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, Finding a place to live and Making

friends

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, in the younger teams, there is similar performance within certain options.

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the middle ages of reactions are about even.

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, the reactions of team elderly people are

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the opposite of the young team.

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, Making

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is the most worrying thing among young people which is 46% and

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Finding a place to stay, at 40% . The least worrying for them is Learning a new

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which is only 29%.

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, the middle generation has the highest number

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39% finding a house, the second

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36% which is meeting new

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35% starting a new

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, the over 50s care about how to learn a new

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the most which

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54%

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, only 23% and 22% are Making new soulmates and searching for a place to stay.

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, the young generations are more bothered about making

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than studying a new

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the older ages are totally the opposite of that. the middle team worries about all these sections almost equally.

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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in the other countries.

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