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ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In many countries large amounts of foods are wasted. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce the amount of food thrown away? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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Introduction
There is no doubt these days that
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indivaduals
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individuals
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the
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eating habitats. The
qeustion
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question
 is why
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do
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the
resident
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residents
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waste
food
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an inapproprate
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inapproprate
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inappropriate
method
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methods
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?
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this complication
these complications
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this
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 complications ? In
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essay
easy
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 I am going to discuss the aetiology of
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 phenomenon.
Body paragraph 1
In terms
causes
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of causes
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 of
lost
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loss
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 a significant amount of
food
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 in some
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regions .The main reason given to
spport
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support
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of
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nation
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national
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awerness
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awareness
 regarding the
procces
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process
 and
and
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the huge effort to prepare
food
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.To illustrate , in some countries
the
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fish
not
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is not
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 available ,
while
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 the companies
buying
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 from
other region
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another region
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 to ensure
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 is covering the
nation
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nation's
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 needs .
Also
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, they
not
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do not
did not
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 recognize the difficult
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undergoes
process
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a process
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 in order to
relase
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release
that
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the
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prodect
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product
project
have
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has
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complete
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completed
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 and achieve all health and other instructions to meet the human
requierments
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requirements
requirement
.
Body paragraph 4
Moreover
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 , the modest sources of
nutreints
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nutrients
 it is
the
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a
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recent matter in some countries .everyone must
be
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undersand
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understand
 and
began
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begin
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 to tackle and solve
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 problem.
Fristly
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Firstly
, utilise
enoght
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enough
 amount of
food
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count
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counting
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number
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the number
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 of
peoplemay
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people may
 have a meal and their
requirment
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requirement
.
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 , do not throw the extra
food
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suitable
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a suitable
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 way or can give
to
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it to
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persone
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person
 may he wanted . or can give the animals .
Conclusion
In conclusion, it is
evidant
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evident
the
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all
indivaduals
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individuals
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are reponsible
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reponsible
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responsible
 to keep and save
a
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food
a portion of food
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food
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 .The governments must
be ensure
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ensure
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 steps are taken to p

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