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3. Parents look to tutors to take care of their children to learn how to take care of their children,to a large extent do you agree or disagree?

#parents #tutors #care #children
People suppose that finding trainers who can direct them to nurture their children is essential. I am generally in favour of
this
 viewpoint with some exceptions and will elaborate on some reasons to justify
this
 stance. On the one hand, advocates state that the assistance of tutors brings favourable effects. The most noteworthy rationale relates to scientific methods.
That is
 to say, when adults learn knowledge from directors, they can educate their offspring in useful ways which have been researched and implemented before. They do not even need to be frightened by virtue of their reliability.
Therefore
, they will not hesitate to adopt these means for children’s education.
For example
, a child can thrive based on a top-notch and scientific direction from their parents,
such
 as a healthy diet and good social skills. These can help them to catch up with
this
 contemporary era in order to climb to high status in
this
 society.
Furthermore
, another justification would appear to be time-saving.
This
 means that, if people can receive training from advisers, they do not need to broaden their horizons with other platforms.
Hence
, they can save time for their work than earn more money to enhance their living standards. From that, they can offer their kids better lives with sufficient conditions to develop their mental and physical health.
Nevertheless
, they
also
 should acquire new information related to child rearing by reading books, and news on the internet to update the modern methods. In conclusion, it would be logical
to conclude
 that the promotion of tutors should be advocated because of scientific methods and time-saving. Yet, in several circumstances,
this
 perception should be rejected.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rely on
  • academic support
  • develop study skills
  • improve performance
  • guidance and support
  • specific subjects
  • self-discipline
  • time management skills
  • positive role models
  • emotional support
  • solely depend on
  • raising children
  • actively involved
  • education
  • overall well-being
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