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The chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries

The chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries
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The bar chart compares twelve countries in terms of the
overall
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 number of
medals
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 that they have won at the
Olympic
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 Games.
It is clear that
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 the USA is by far the most successful
Olympic
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 medal-winning nation. Notably, the figures for
gold
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,
silver
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 and
bronze
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medals
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 won by any particular country are similar. The USA has won a total of around 2,300
Olympic
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medals
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, including approximately 900
gold
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medals
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, 750
silver
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 and 650
bronze
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. In second place on the all-time
medals
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 chart is the Soviet Union, with just over 1,000
medals
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. Again, the number of
gold
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medals
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 won by
this
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 country is slightly higher than the number of
silver
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 or
bronze
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medals
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. Only four other countries - the UK, France, Germany and Italy - have won more than 500
Olympic
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medals
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, all with similar proportions of each medal colour. Apart from the USA and the Soviet Union, China is the only other country with a noticeably higher proportion of
gold
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medals
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 (about 200) compared to
silver
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 and
bronze
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 (about 100 each).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, olympic, gold, silver, bronze with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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