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More and more people decide to eat healthy food and exercise regularly. What are the reasons for this trend? What can be done to encourage more people to eat healthier and exercise?

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Because eating healthy
food
 is very good for our health,there are many vitamins,minerals and nutrients in it. It is supplying all of the nutrients for our body.
Besides
 that, it is very good for the teen people because they are in the development process if they eat healthy
food
 every day,they never have pimples and
short
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,they will be taller and stronger. Especialy smarter. We can make some leaflets and designs some advice like “You should eat healthy
food
 and do
exercise
 regularly”on paper and stick it
in
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 the wall or give it to your friends or strangers to give them a piece of advice.
Besides
 that,
exercise
 regularly helps us train our speed and helps our bones solid. We can get up early and do some
exercise
such
 as running,walking or cycling for 30 to 60 minutes every day. In sum, eating healthy
food
 and doing
exercise
 is
an
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important
things
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 that we should realize in our life.
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