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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

#threats #humans #face #st #century #sea #levels #rise #rates
Everyone already knows that our younger generation often takes an example from the older, wiser generation. All siblings always try to be like their older sisters or brothers, if they have any. So I have some advice for those who are very familiar with
this
.
To begin
 with, I suggest you come up with some rules that your junior should follow. These restrictions should not be severe because the kid will not be able to cultivate without them. I have a few rules I can give you for an idea;
for example
, when we go for a walk, I do not let them run too far. They must always be near me, or at least in my field of vision. The second thing, but no less critical, I will give you some advice. Most of the time, when I come up with rules for kids, I
also
 try to follow them.
For example
, going to bed early, doing homework, et cetera. In the beginning, the children will not want
this
, but depending on how you do it, they will probably repeat it after you. You must know that all
this
 will only work after a
while
; it will take weeks or months. The main thing is never to back down, and you have to be firm and not often poke their desires, but trust me, you will like the result.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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