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the plans below show a public park when it first onpened in 1920 and the same park today

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The two plans shown are that of a public
park
. The first is showing how the
park
look ed
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 when it was originally made, back in 1920. The second is showing how the
park
 looks today. In the time that the
park
 has
stayed
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 there
has
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 been many updates and a few things that have stayed the same. To start, the main
feature
 in the middle of the
park
 has been changed from having a water fountain in the
center
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 to having a lovely rose garden with a seating area all around it. Another obvious change is that of the old glass house.
This
 has been removed and replaced by a different style of water
feature
. The new water
feature
 seems like it was created not to be the main focus of the
park
, but an elegant
feature
 that blends in well with its surroundings. I believe the biggest change to the
park
 is the removal of the rose garden which was located on the
right hand
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 side. It is now a cafe,
whch
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which
 shows how times have changed and how the designers were looking to see how they could make the
park
 more modern and incorporate an area for people to sit down and enjoy food and drinks, giving them more of a reason to stay and embrace the nature around them. Only a couple of things have been kept the same over the period that the
park
 has been around. The first
being
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 the two entrances to the north and the south of the
park
. The second
being
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 the rose garden on the
left hand
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 side. Maybe
this
 was left so there
was
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 still some beautiful natural colours in the
park
. One thing that grabbed my attention when looking at the differences in the
park
 was the fact that they updated the stage for musicians into an amphitheatre for concerts. I think
this
 shows how the
park
 has been transformed into more of a
modern
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 area for all ages to enjoy.
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