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The title "I had to show courage." Describe a circumstance where you had to exercise courage. What action of yours required a lot of bravery? Afterwards, did you feel proud of yourself? How did your surroundings respond?

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Courage is a state of mind which enables a person to face problems, difficulty, danger and pains without feeling any
fear
. People can show that they are courageous in different situations.
However
, there are some people who are not that strong and they are not willing to face a difficult situation. As in my case, I had to exercise my courage in various situations both in my personal and professional life. I recalled that when I was a first student at the University of Mauritius doing my
Bachelor
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 Degree, we had to organise ourselves into a group of 5 to 6 students in order to make a formal presentation in front of the class on a particular topic. I had never talked in public and in front of an audience.
This
 became a stress for me and did not know how to manage the situation.
Although
 I did a lot of practice, focused on the subject and performed a of deep breathing, I could still feel the
fear
 of public speaking. The main
fear
 inside me was the underlying judgment and negative evaluation by the audience. At
this
 very moment, when our turn came, I had no other choice than to master my courage and talk before
classmates
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 and teachers.
However
, during my
speech
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 I felt that I was gradually gaining confidence
into
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 myself and
this
 drove me more fearless
and
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I was able to move forward with my speech smoothly and I was feeling at ease. I felt very proud of myself since
this
 was the first time that I had to address an audience and
also
 I was able to develop my
abilities
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 to speak confidently and without any
fear
. The next day at the University, all my friends came to see me and they congratulated me for my performance in front of the class.
This
 was a memorable moment for me as I was able to make new friends as well in my class.
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Your essay effectively details a personal experience demonstrating courage, achieving a good structure. However, to enhance coherence, consider introducing more varied transition phrases to smoothly link ideas between paragraphs. This can guide readers more fluidly through your narrative.
task achievement
You've successfully addressed the task, sharing a clear and comprehensive story of overcoming fear. For further improvement, try to expand on the reflection of your experience. Discuss in more detail how this event impacted you in the long term and whether it changed your approach to facing fears or public speaking.

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