You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter. -Correct the information in the article -Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information -Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

Linking Words

letter to address some inaccuracies in the recent article about my hometown that was published in your travel magazine.

Firstly

Linking Words

, I would like to point out

mistake

Add an article

a mistake

show examples

you did

while

Linking Words

you

written

Add the auxiliary verb

wrote

have written

show examples

Correct article usage

the

show examples

article. You mentioned

wrong

Change the article

the wrong

show examples

location of my

hotel

Use synonyms

Moreover

Linking Words

, the telephone number you

written

Add the auxiliary verb

wrote

have written

show examples

was

also

Linking Words

wrong.

Secondly

Linking Words

, it is important for me to correct the information because most

Change preposition

apply

show examples

travellers

Add an article

the travellers

show examples

going to

Correct pronoun usage

their destination

show examples

destination

Fix the agreement mistake

destinations

show examples

based on what they read in the travel magazine. To illustrate

this

Linking Words

, you mentioned

wrong

Correct article usage

the wrong

show examples

phone number in an article, and

as a result

Linking Words

, I lose a number of travellers who

coming

Wrong verb form

came

show examples

to my

hotel

Use synonyms

Consequently

Linking Words

, my

hotel

Use synonyms

's annual growth will become less.

Lastly

Linking Words

, I would request you to update incorrect information about my

hotel

Use synonyms

in your next magazine. I would appreciate your immediate attention regarding

this

Linking Words

matter. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Milav Soni

writing7Mon Apr 17 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

9
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

153 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6
band
Some people think that cars should be banned from city centers to reduce pollution.
Air pollution is one of the most important issues in this decade, and the assertion that the government should ban cars from city centers is unreasonable. I am afraid I have to disagree because we have alternative solutions such as increasing use of the public transportation and using electric cars, which they can conduct. I will examine and explain why I prefer these solutions.
7.5
band
Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, but other believes that children should not go to school until they are older. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is argued that teenagers should be allowed to go to school when they are still at an early age while an alternative point of view is that minors do not need to start studying in institutions until they get enough old. This essay agrees with the latter options and will lay out the reasoning below.
7.5
band
Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students should be encouraged to question and offer criticisms to their teachers. Other think this will lead to a loss of respect discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Whether students should be empowered to assess their educators has been a hotly debated topic. While some argue this means a loss of respect and order in the classroom, I tend to believe this policy is not completely negative as long as it is carefully regulated.
7.5
band
Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In today's world of technological advancement, while several individuals assert that the internet has facilitated people's social life due to the more spending time chatting on social media such as Instagram, others reckon electronic devices as an adverse effect on man's socialization. I firmly disagree with the auspicious impact of the prosperity of technology on people's strive to socialize because the majority of people have become more introverted in the sense of no need for communication in real life in conjunction with having an unstable self-esteem.
8
band
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter: * explain why you think you would be suitable for the job * say what else you could do for the family * give your reasons for wanting the job
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Smith,

Some people think that cars should be banned from city centers to reduce pollution.

Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, but other believes that children should not go to school until they are older. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students should be encouraged to question and offer criticisms to their teachers. Other think this will lead to a loss of respect discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?