Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some think that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives through sporting events such as the Olympics or the World Cup. Others think that there are better ways to encourage adults to exercise. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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In recent times most

adults

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do few activities. Some people believe that being encouraged to live healthy lives

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through

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as the Olympics games and the World Cup. Others believe that there are better ways to encourage

adults

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to exercise.

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with, there are some reasons which cause

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concern why

adults

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do less activity. I think many

adults

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are just wasting their time, scrolling through social media

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as Facebook or Instagram. Some

adults

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spend time on Instagram. What is more, they always keep their Instagram page updated with lots of photos,

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using.

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keeping in touch with someone or something like that.

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learning new information from the book ,

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slipped their mind.

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, these

adults

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miss out on their productivity and

they

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apply

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lose eyesight and cause brain fatigue and influence their nerve impulses by using a lot of phones. So these

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are big fans of a training variety of

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, it depends on their personality.

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, I point out that doing

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will help to get rid of stress and will help control your

lives

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life

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, as I mentioned before with related interests.

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, chess or checkers. When it comes to they play checkers or chess with close friends or relatives. In my opinion, yes it will help stimulate brain activities, in turn, help to improve their memory. So when they play chess it will help broaden their horizon.

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being an

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person.

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, they attend any kind of

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competition by training

these

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in these

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sports

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. And these

adults

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get rid of

quietly

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themselves quietly

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from

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the social network. The main conclusion, shortly speaking must be interested in anything.

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they achieve goals in the future. Most

adults

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passed to a healthy lifestyle in my country.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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302 words

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Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some think that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives through sporting events such as the Olympics or the World Cup. Others think that there are better ways to encourage adults to exercise. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Your opinion

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays, more tasks at home and or are being performed by robots. Is this a negative or positive development?

In some countries was in the house is more important than rented one what might be the cause is this positive or negative development

Many feel that happiness is mainly an individual responsibility while others feel that there are important external factors. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent abd eventually replace traditional ways of food preparation. To waht extebt do you agree or disagree with this opinion?