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From the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be engouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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From many time ago, the total of international
tourism
 is increased every year. Someone believes that
tourism
 in the local areas is beneficial and should be supported it. In my opinion, I agree with support for travel in the local area. In
this
 essay, I will discuss how important
tourism
 is in the local place
such
 as income and economy. First of all, I saw that if
tourism
 in local communities is growing up
that is
 good for
people
 in the area because they will have jobs in their area.
Secondly
, the place will develop
such
 as hotels, and restaurants.
In addition
, at present, many countries try to promote travelling in local
places
for example
, in my country the government try to show many
places
 to invite many tourists to visit and teach
people
 in areas to show local products and teach them how to serve other
people
 so,
people
 in areas will get more income from
tourism
. On other hand, many
people
 believe that travelling to local
places
 will disrupt
places
 like tourists will destroy nature or the environment. Some tourists do not take care of the environment and it is very important to everyone should think about it.
To sum up
, I totally agree with is very important to support and promote travelling in local
places
 because it is a very good benefit for us
such
 as income, business and the development of
places
. Anyway, it is some bad points about it so, everyone must do it in a good way like government should let
people
 how to take care of nature.
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