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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent you do agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, as globalization develops rapidly, some people argue that foreign
visitors
 are supposed to pay more than local
visitors
 for some places of interest.
However
, I firmly disagree with
this
 opinion. My points of view will be illustrated in three aspects. To start with, it is unfair to treat
visitors
 who come from other countries
country
 differently because everyone is born equal.
In addition
, people are not able to choose where they were born, so some local governments cannot
charge
 more just because they are foreigners, which could even cause racism.
Furthermore
, in order to create an excellent experience for foreign
visitors
, the
host
country
's government is not supposed to
charge
 more. Foreign
visitors
 are the main force for promoting local
tourism
, and they have spent a lot on their travel and accommodation.
Therefore
, if they are charged more than the local
visitors
, they may be disappointed.
Last
 but not least, in order to boost
tourism
, the
host
country
's government is supposed to
charge
 fairly, and even provide favourable policies
instead
 of charging more to foreign
visitors
. Only in
this
 way, are the foreign
visitors
 able to gain excellent travel experience, and
then
 they will appreciate and publicize
this
country
 to their friends.
Therefore
, the
host
country
 will get better development in its
tourism
.
To sum up
, from my perspective, it is impracticable for the
host
country
's government to
charge
 more for foreign
visitors
.
Instead
, every effort should be made to attract foreign
visitors
 in order to boost
tourism
.
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