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Is technology limiting creativity? Discuss your opinion

#technology #creativity
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Technology
 has improved
as a result
 of
booming
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of
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innovations in the modern world and it gave a positive impact on inventions.
This
 essay will analyse about progressive effect created by
technology
 in the area of creativity. Primarily
the
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as
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 the influence of
the
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sophisticated technologies, the way of creating new
ideas
are
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 much easier because of accuracy and cunningness .The various programs and software are enhancing the ability of thinking ,
due to
 which more productivity of beautiful creations happens and it can be easily constructed without making errors. The computer software
which
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used by modern civil engineers
are
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 easing the way to do more efficient jobs with low cost and
less
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 errors.
Furthermore
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 the complicated calculations and diagrams are easily sorted out with the help of these systems
,
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so that the engineers can reduce stress and build a beautiful building in their imagination. Over
all
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the
technology
 helped
to
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me to
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 be more creative with less expensive and errors.
Apart from
this
,it has given an immense chance to explore
the
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creative
ideas
 to
the
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people around the globe ,
as a
result
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 they can be attracted and get a fruitful value for their products.Earlier it was limited
due to
lack
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 of platforms and
market
, but the improved
technology
 opened a
market
 throughout the world, where they can easily sell and earn more money .
This phenomena
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 will
be
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attract more people to be productive and create their
ideas
 and encourage them to be
in
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the
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part of
globalised
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market
. Another fact is that the improvised
technology
give
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 them to show their hidden talents to the world, which was underestimated without getting proper stages.On the whole,it has opened a global
market
 and stage
of
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the
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people to be more creative. In conclusion ,
technology
 has driven
the
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creativity to a new era by providing various
ideas
 and programs and which escalated the chance to explore in front of others . So I consider it promoted
the
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creativity rather than
limiting
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.
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