what are the advantages and the disadvantages for children of television?

there is an argument
that’s
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children who always watch
television
have a benefit and a negative impact. Viewing on
television
sometimes give a big risk
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their
healthy
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. Currently, many teenage early in the morning and even late
night
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watching
television
becomes
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their daily habits. Let’s start by looking at the advantages
for
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children of
television
.
First,
not only it helps them to develop an interest in learning and remembering
the
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pictures easily but
also
it provides useful information about social, natural, history and human society for them to have more understanding about prospects
due to
wide
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of educational programs
such
as BBC.
Moreover
, it can improve foreign language
skill
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when watching cartoons or movies which are produced by international film agencies.
For example
, my
sister
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cousin had ameliorated his
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listening skill by watching
television
cartoons with original dubbing. Another drawback is that watching
television
will affect
on
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children’s eyes, like short-sighted status because youngsters often tend to sit for long hours watching their favourite shows, series or games .
Therefore
, they always have to
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to do studying and working.
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,
it
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harm
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to
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sleep and other
heath
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health
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issues or it may impact
on
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social development.
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,
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a neighbor
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neighbor
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younger near
house
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had their brain influenced by watching too much
television
because she doesn’t cease thinking about a certain program
to
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television
.
Consequently
, she
convulsive
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for long period. In conclusion,
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parents should have guidance on what teenagers should watch and give them a limited time to watch.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • engaging
  • linguistic skills
  • exposure
  • inappropriate content
  • distort
  • optimizing
  • debate
  • implications
  • viewing habits
  • parental guidance
  • educational programs
  • screen time
  • stereotypes
  • unhealthy behaviors
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