the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
The
pie
graphs depict information about energy produced by fossil fuels in France and Australia from 1980 to 2000. After analysing the
pie
charts, it can be seen clearly that in 1980,
a
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seen for producing hydropower and natural gas in France,
whereas
hydropower was almost twofold in
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year and natural gas declined by 18
units
. The
units
of generating electricity by coal and oil
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50 and 10, respectively in 1980 and in 2000, coal
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increased by 80, but oil decreased by 8
units
. Moving
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, coal and oil
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producing
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amount of electricity in both
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figures in Australia which
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constituted
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25. The production of power via hydro and natural power was 45
units
collectively in 1980,
while
in 2000, it was only 2
however
, a difference of 116
units
was seen
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energy by nuclear power in both
pie
figures.
Overall
, it is crystal clear that the maximum
units
of electricity by coal in Australia, whilst the minimum was natural and hydropower in France.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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