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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should read only those books that are about real events, real people, and established facts. Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

#people #books #events #facts #support
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Nowadays, most
of
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people
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the people
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 gain
a knowledge
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knowledge
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 from
books
 that are about real individuals,
sat
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set
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 up
news
 and events so they can not get full of
news
 from only those
books
. In my opinion, there is a negative
affect
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effect
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specially
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 for
young
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the young
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 generation so some
people
 believe
that
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fake statements.
Firstly
,
young
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the young
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 generation read
a
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news
 on the internet
instead
 of
books
 because it is more comfortable for them and easier to gain
a knowledge
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knowledge
a piece of knowledge
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 so they may not make a breakthrough from
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
books
. In my opinion, it is
drawback
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a drawback
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 for
young
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the young
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 generations because there is not
enaugh
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enough
information
 about
world's
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the world's
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news
.
Secondly
, events and real
information
 is needed for everyone in order to gain some
information
that is
 about real life
instead
 of artificial life
due to
 there
are
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 a lot of artificial
news
 on the internet.
On the other hand
, if we can change society to be positive
by
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internet
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the internet
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,
community
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a community
the community
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 of users of
social
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the social
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platform
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platforms
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 will be changed because consumers can be given wrong
information
 to society so individuals have to prefer
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
books
 that can
effect
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affect
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 our
mind
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minds
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positivily
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positively
positivity
.
Moreover
,
cyper
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cyber
cypher
books
 have to be admitted by
government
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the government
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 in the country because everyone has
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a smart
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smart phone
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smartphone
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 that can be used for reading
it
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them
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.
When
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 time passes, individuals are
prefering
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preferring
 online platforms to
books
.
To sum up
, in the past,
books
 were read by
people
however
,
in
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 the beginning of the 20th century, technology has
been
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increased
dramatacly
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dramatically
 and
writters
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writers
 who write
natural
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 fact has been falling so most
of
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apply
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people
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the people
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 would rather
reading
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 on
the
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technology
instead
 of sheets.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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