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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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These days, the cost of living is going higher and higher all the time. Most folks keep struggling to find a way to downsize life expenses. Needless to say, exorbitant prices for hiring an accommodation guide
inhabitant
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 to purchase a home
consequently
. Undoubtedly,
this
 condition has several benefits for householders like
the
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peacefulness. There is no doubt that a high amount of people's income is spent
for
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 renting a habitation, especially in underdeveloped countries where rental prices are high exorbitantly because of economic recession
along with
 the lack of rentable residences so the majority of the community
try
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 to exhaust even
an
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 studio apartment rather than hire a spacious
house
. As a
consequences
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, they can set aside a big money for their other spending;
for example
, the chance of having new cars would be increased among
house
 owners. Apart from
money saving
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 value, possessing a home without hesitation can open up doors to
the
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comfort.
Moreover
, not only does it make you
to
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enjoy peace in your own home, but it
also
vanish
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 the chance of having
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conversation
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conversations
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 with Avid landlords who shoot up rental
fee
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 year
on
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 year. What's more, you do not have to move on a yearly basis if you do not accept the newly extortionate charge which is mentioned in most contrasts.
Additionally
, housekeepers can decorate their own
house
 in
what
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 way they want
that
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 is forbidden in rental homes. All in all, Having
properties
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 is one of the
desirable
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 feelings for mankind so most citizens tend to own a
house
 rather than
hiring
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 one because of its monetary
beneficial
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as well as
 its comfort.
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