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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions

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Over the past few decades, many cities around the world have seen an alarming increase in the level of youth misconduct.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons for
this
 and some possible solutions to mitigate
this
 rise in
teens
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crime
 trends worldwide. The first reason is connected with the family. In order for the child to grow up in a balanced way, they must be nurtured well by their parents.
However
, these days, it is very often that children are neglected.
This
 may be because parents are so busy with their work schedules.
Therefore
, they cannot support and care for offspring when needed.
In addition
 to that, poverty will increase throughout the world.
For example
,we have seen and experienced that rich people get richer and poor people
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get poorer, which will cause another root factor for the growth of youth
crime
.
Although
 discrepancies in income level are not a factor to justify committing the wrongdoing, it will directly impact the underdevelopment level.
Hence
 teens suffering from difficulty tend to do illegal activities to seek comfortable lives.
However
, there are ways to tackle
such
 problems. First and foremost means are giving good family, positive friendships, good education and career opportunities.
Accordingly
, providing access to education and training opportunities as appropriate to their needs.
For instance
, we know that unemployment and poverty lead to an accelerating youth
crime
 rate.
Consequently
, if government arrange peer tutoring and programs that support obtaining the necessary job skills and getting the desired job,
on the other hand
, to combat
this
 issue is to implement strict punishments.
Otherwise
, it will take a lot of work to overcome the minority
crime
 trends. So it is vital to have severe punishment to deter teenagers from lawlessness. Parents
also
 have to take more responsibility for their children’s actions because it is the root cause of the beginning of the infraction.
To sum up
, even though juvenile violation rates are climbing, there are strategies to control
this
 problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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