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Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen or pencil. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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A significant number of
people
 are shifting toward technology devices from traditional methods for writing purposes. The convenience of technology is one of the many reasons behind
this
 trend. I believe
this
 is a positive step. Writing with a pen or pencil is less popular now. The development of technology plays a remarkable role in
this
 story.
People
 prefer to type on phones or computers
instead
 of writing since it is more convenient. Whenever
people
 need to write they use their smartphone, sometimes they even don’t have to type, there are many online applications that type words when
people
 speak.
Consequently
, individuals rarely write with pen or pencils.
Moreover
, when a letter or message is being typed it is more clear and legible, and everybody can easily read it,
while
 a handwritten letter can cause many problems
due to
 the form of writing. There are several benefits to
this
 development.
Firstly
, it is difficult to keep paper-based writing for decades in its original shape,
whereas
 modern innovation is equipped with cloud storage.
This
 means anyone can save their data to the cloud and have access anytime and anywhere.
Moreover
,
this
also
 helps to protect the environment. As in the past students and corporations used paper writing which was made of trees. Now we preserved many jungles as we do not use paper for study and office work.
To conclude
, handwriting is not popular among the public now because of the convenience of typing and being readable by anyone is the main reason that fewer
people
 use pens or pencils. It
also
 contributes to saving the environment which is a positive event.
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Include more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. While mentioning technology and cloud storage is a good start, expanding on these with clear, detailed examples or statistics could make your arguments more convincing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Convenience
  • Efficiency
  • Curriculums
  • Environmental benefits
  • Productivity
  • Accessibility
  • Cognitive development
  • Personal touch
  • Overreliance
  • Data insecurity
  • Privacy issues
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