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Some young people are leaving the country side to live in cities and towns leaving only young people in the countryside’s. What problems are caused by this issue ? what can be done to solve this situation

Some young people are leaving the country side to live in cities and towns leaving only young people in the countryside’s. What problems are caused by this issue ? what can be done to solve this situation
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Urban life has attracted many young
people
 from rural areas over recent years . Today , a number of young individuals are moving from rural to urban in order to live .
As a result
 of
this
 , elderly
people
 are continuing to live
rural
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in rural
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 places .
This
 trend causes some problems ,
such
 as increasing overpopulation only
centre
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the centre
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 of town and
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a decrease
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decrease
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decreases
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 in the productivity of agriculture .
However
 , the authority can solve these problems by investing in the countryside .
To begin
 with , the living
urbans
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urban
 has a lot of benefits and more attention every person . Which
is
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are
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 skyscrapers and different entertainment locations .
For instance
 , if you live in
countryside
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the countryside
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that
is means
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means
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, it has
not
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no
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 water , gas and electricity .
That is
 why each human wants to go
cities
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to cities
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 . Because of the fact that
,
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apply
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every town has whatever you
want
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,want
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 you find it .
Such
 as
,
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apply
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gas , water and energy .
In addition
 , each 100m has shops and
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a pharmacy
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pharmacy
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pharmacies
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. The reason is that young families are leaving the countryside to live in cities . The solution
of
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to
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this
 problem , the government of every country can find a solution to the trouble by funding in
suroundding
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surrounding
.
Firstly
 , spending more money
for
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on
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building
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the building
a building
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 .
Secondly
 , investing in the road system and railway . For example , I think the highest floor of a village is 8 ,
While
 the tallest building of a city is 60 floors . It means ,
government
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the government
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 more consideration
this
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on this
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 side .
Moreover
 , the roads are very low quality . That condition allows
people
 to drive in cars . Because the ways are uneven , special attention should be paid to
this
 . I think
these
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this
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 can be the solution .
To conclude
 , many
people
 migrate
in
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to
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 big cities .
Therefore
 , the influx of
large
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a large
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 population from
rural
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a rural
the rural
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area
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areas
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. To solve
this
 , leadership
more
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apply
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provide capital for
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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.
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