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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares and contrasts five different ways ,
which
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 older citizens in the USA utilised their leisure
time
 , which were measured in percentage over a 20-
year
time
 period from 1980 to 2000.
Overall
 , watching tv was the popular activity that most elderly people did in their free
time
 .
Whereas
 , after some years it was surpassed by hiking.
Firstly
 , around 60% of older people were into watching television in the initial
year
 and
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remained stable until 2000 .
However
, after ,that it experienced a moderate drop in
their
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its
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 rating and reached approximately 65% in the final
year
.
Whereas
, surfing
in
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on
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 social media was the most unlikely leisure
time
 activity for
elderly
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the elderly
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 in 1980, which was only a minority.
By contrast
 , after 10 years
it's
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its
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 popularity leapt slightly to 12% in 2000 and constituted almost
a
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half in 2010. Surprisingly, hiking made up a significant surge throughout the
year
 ,
and
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surpassed television after 2000 , and reached a peak of 80% in the latter
year
. Meanwhile, both theatre and reading comprised some fluctuations until 2000.
By contrast
, after ,that the popularity of reading soared dramatically and reached 60% in 2010.
While
 , for ,theatre it was almost 42% in the
last
year
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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