The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The diagram illustrates eight different steps that
used
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for producing
milk
and the items like cheese , cream and butter. In general, cows were sent for a process called grazing so that it can increase
the
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milk
productivity , and in the final stage , the
milk
and the products of
milk
are distributed for the sale in stores. To be specific, in the initial stage cows were fed very well for
milk
production .
Secondly
, the cows are milked using a milking machine twice a day .
Thirdly
, the produced
milk
is
then
stored in a cylinder-shaped chamber called refrigerator storage . Moving forward, the stored
milk
is
then
pumped directly into a
milk
tanker for daily delivery to the dairy. After that , in
dairy
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the
milk
and the byproducts
such
as cheese and butter were separated from it .
Subsequently
, the pure
milk
is
then
pasteurized and packed for distribution and delivered to shops and supermarkets so that people can purchase it for household purposes.
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