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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, there are many different types of food for
people
 around the world. For some reason as I notice, the increasing popularity of
convenience
foods
 has
finally
 replaced them with traditional
foods
 and the ways to prepare them.
This
 essay will discuss why
this
 is true.
Firstly
, the leading factor for the popularity of
convenience
foods
 is working hours. Employees work most of the day time, or in some cases, they return back home late, so there is no extra time for cooking traditional
foods
.
For example
, a woman goes to work at six in the morning and comes back at three in the afternoon, so she just eats something easy to prepare and
then
 falls asleep.
Secondly
, most
people
 care a lot about their body and their health situation. They go to the gym, exercise hard and eat very well, like
foods
 with low calories and low fat or sugar and full of protein and
fiber
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this
 is why they lose their interest in traditional
foods
, which are much more harmful. The
last
 reason for
this
 popularity is because of the existence of the many food
centers
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 where their quality is accepted in every respect, so if someone wants to eat a portion of traditional food like Ghor-me-sabzi she just picks up her phone and orders one of them. It is true that some
people
 like to cook every day and prefer their own traditional
foods
such
 as housewives, but for most
people
, it is so hard and unnecessary to do it every time;
this
 is why they choose to eat
convenience
foods
 than traditional ones.
To conclude
, the life situation of the majority of
people
 is going in the direction where,
due to
 their employment or health status, they use more
convenience
foods
instead
 of local
foods
; and
also
, if they want traditional
foods
, they can just order one of them with the best quality for themselves.
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