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Nowadays more and more teenagers take a gap year before entering university. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

#teenagers #gap #year #university #trend
In these
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 days,
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a majorty
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majorty
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majority
 of youngsters are taking a
year
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 break before commencing
University
study
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. The main benefit of
this
trend
 is to
gain
 practical job
experience
 and the main negative is to leave
the
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higher
study
 permanently after taking
a
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education
 gap. In my opinion, the positives of
this
trend
 overcome its negatives. The essay will intend to analyze
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both opinion in
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 with relevant examples. On the positive side, the prime benefit of taking a
year
 break before joining
University
study
 is to secure practical
work
experience
.
In other words
, youngsters can
gain
 quality
work
experience
 in the field of engineering, medicine and hotel management by securing a
year
 break.
For example
, a recent survey through "Oxford
University
" reveals that in
year
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 2021, 30% of students who take a
one
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year
 break and
gain
 quality
work
experience
 received huge success in their annual exams.
Therefore
, from my point of view,
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positives of
this
trend
 overcome its negatives. On the negative side, a majority of youngsters, leave
the
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higher
study
 permanently after taking
a
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an
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education
 gap. It has been observed that when teenagers, earn a handsome salary through
work
,
then
 they prefer to do regular
work
 rather
then
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 taking
admission
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in
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 Universities.
For instance
, after my senior secondary exam results, 25% of my classmates did regular
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work
 and left tertiary
education
.
As a consequence
, they could not
achive
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achieve
 higher
post
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posts
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 in their respective fields. In conclusion,
majorty
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majority
 of
younsters
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youngsters
 taking a
year
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year's
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 break before commencing
University
study
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studies
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. The main benefit of
this
trend
 is to
gain
 practical job
experience
 and the main negative is leaving
the
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apply
show examples
higher
study
 permanently after taking
a
Change the article
an
show examples
education
 gap. In my opinion, the positives of
this
trend
 overcome its negatives.
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