Nowadays more and more teenagers take a gap year before entering university. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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days,
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a majorty
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majorty
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majority
of youngsters are taking a
year
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break before commencing
University
study
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. The main benefit of
this
trend
is to
gain
practical job
experience
and the main negative is to leave
the
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higher
study
permanently after taking
a
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education
gap. In my opinion, the positives of
this
trend
overcome its negatives. The essay will intend to analyze
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both opinion in
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with relevant examples. On the positive side, the prime benefit of taking a
year
break before joining
University
study
is to secure practical
work
experience
.
In other words
, youngsters can
gain
quality
work
experience
in the field of engineering, medicine and hotel management by securing a
year
break.
For example
, a recent survey through "Oxford
University
" reveals that in
year
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2021, 30% of students who take a
one
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year
break and
gain
quality
work
experience
received huge success in their annual exams.
Therefore
, from my point of view,
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positives of
this
trend
overcome its negatives. On the negative side, a majority of youngsters, leave
the
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higher
study
permanently after taking
a
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an
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education
gap. It has been observed that when teenagers, earn a handsome salary through
work
,
then
they prefer to do regular
work
rather
then
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taking
admission
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in
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Universities.
For instance
, after my senior secondary exam results, 25% of my classmates did regular
full time
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work
and left tertiary
education
.
As a consequence
, they could not
achive
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achieve
higher
post
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posts
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in their respective fields. In conclusion,
majorty
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majority
of
younsters
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youngsters
taking a
year
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year's
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break before commencing
University
study
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studies
show examples
. The main benefit of
this
trend
is to
gain
practical job
experience
and the main negative is leaving
the
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apply
show examples
higher
study
permanently after taking
a
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an
show examples
education
gap. In my opinion, the positives of
this
trend
overcome its negatives.
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