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Nowadays more and more teenagers take a gap year before entering university. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

#teenagers #gap #year #university #trend
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year
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 break before commencing
University
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. The main benefit of
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trend
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 is to
gain
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 and the main negative is to leave
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higher
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education
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 gap. In my opinion, the positives of
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 overcome its negatives. The essay will intend to analyze
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 with relevant examples. On the positive side, the prime benefit of taking a
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 break before joining
University
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study
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 is to secure practical
work
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experience
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.
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, youngsters can
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experience
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 in the field of engineering, medicine and hotel management by securing a
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, a recent survey through "Oxford
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" reveals that in
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 2021, 30% of students who take a
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 received huge success in their annual exams.
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positives of
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 overcome its negatives. On the negative side, a majority of youngsters, leave
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higher
study
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 permanently after taking
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education
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 gap. It has been observed that when teenagers, earn a handsome salary through
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 they prefer to do regular
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 rather
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then
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 taking
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in
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, after my senior secondary exam results, 25% of my classmates did regular
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work
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 and left tertiary
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, they could not
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achieve
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 in their respective fields. In conclusion,
majorty
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majority
 of
younsters
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youngsters
 taking a
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year
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year's
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 break before commencing
University
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study
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studies
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. The main benefit of
this
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trend
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 is to
gain
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 practical job
experience
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 and the main negative is leaving
the
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apply
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higher
study
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 permanently after taking
a
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an
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education
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 gap. In my opinion, the positives of
this
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trend
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 overcome its negatives.
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