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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area or Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area or Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table illustrates the police budget and the pie charts represent how the police budget
money
 was spent in one area of Britain from 2017 to 2018.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the percentage of
national
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 government had the highest position and other sources
was
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 the least.
One
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 the other hand, most of the
money
 was spent
in
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 buildings and transport
while
 less
money
 was spent
in
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 technology, except
of
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salaries which remained
same
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 during the period. In terms of the table, there was an increase in
national
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 government of 17.5m in 2017 and 177.8m in 2018. The figure for local taxes rose from 91.2m to 102.3m between 2027 and 2018 respectively.
However
, other sources were almost
same
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 just 38m to 38.5m during the year.
Police
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 budget got
money
 from those sources in total around 318.6m in 2018 and 304.7m in 2017. In the pie chart , the proportion of
money
waste
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in
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 building and transport was
upbto
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up to
upto
 69% in 2018 and in 2017 it was at 75%. The
money
 was spent
in
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 salaries (officers and staff) at 17% which remained unchanged in 2017 and 2018 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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