Students from disadvantaged families and rural areas are finding it difficult to gat a university education. Some people believw that universities should help them. To what extent do you agree or diasgree?

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Nowadays, a lot of
individuals
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are disconnecting from modern society and they do not have
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the ability
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to study at universities and other educational institutions. There are many activists who claimed that universities should take responsibility
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providing good quality
education
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. From my perspective, I support
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. So, in
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I will
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with, there are many benefits that outweigh the drawbacks.
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, if
person
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the person
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was born somewhere remote from the city in
rural
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a rural
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area it does not mean that he or she is
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and stupid. They could be very
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and have
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for
education
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.
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, these people
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are so motivated. One of the reasons why they are motivated is that they want to have a better life ,
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their
lifestyle and ambience in general.
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, these
individuals
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are as well our future as those who live in cities and have access to normal
education
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.
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, If we can provide
education
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for all classes from lower to upper classes we will decrease the level of
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poverty in many countries. There are some solutions in order to unravel
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issue. First of all ,
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is not a big amount of money which is authority need to spend
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provide good quality of
education
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. The statistics show that two
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of
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dollars spend around the world every day on
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.
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, we need only twelve billion
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dollars to supply
education
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for everyone who needs it around the world.
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, universities must pay for all amenities and
education
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for
individuals
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who
are need
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it.
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, all educational institutions should create separate classes where people from villages and
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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will be studying. Even construct new buildings for applicants. In conclusion,
education
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for people from
rural
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a rural
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area
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is so crucial
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considering
that they are our future and all educational institutions should do everything possible for these
individuals
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