The table below shows the weight of people in a particular country from 1999 to 2009.

The table below shows the weight of people in a particular country from 1999 to 2009.
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The table illustrates the percentages of males and females at different physical fitness levels in a particular nation between 1999 and 2009. Obviously, most
women
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and men were at normal weight during the research period.
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the percentage of overweight
women
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increased, the reverse was true for men. In 1999, 49% of
women
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had a normal weight,
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the figure for those who were
underweight
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stood at about half of that
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. A similar pattern was seen in males but the figures were smaller, at 41% and 22% respectively. Overweight females made up 18% in that year, much lower than that of female counterparts, with 30%. The percentages of
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women
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and men both rose in 2004, to 51% and 48% respectively, before falling to 47% each in 2009.
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, overweight females and males accounted for smaller percentages of the population in 2004, at 21% and 23%, and both figures
then
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went down to 19% each in 2009. Despite a rise of 2% in the first five years, the percentage of
women
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underweight
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then
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decreased by 1%.
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, the opposite trends were witnessed in
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men’s percentage, with 20% and 23% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, underweight with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.
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