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Your next door neighbor owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night. Write a letter to your neighbor requesting that something be done about the dog. Include in your letter: oYour reason for writing oWhat you would like to happen oA nice, respectful style.

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Dear Smith, I hope
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neighbor
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, and I hope my words convey the utmost respect. I am a student of English literature and next month I have my final exams and I am not focusing on my study because of your dog barking all day and night. I understand that pets, like humans, have their moments, and
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 entirely natural.
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, the persistent barking has been causing some disruption in my daily activities and sleep. I am reaching out to kindly request your assistance in finding a solution to alleviate the barking.Perhaps there are ways to address the underlying cause or explore options to minimize the noise.I believe open communication is vital in maintaining the
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 of our community, and I am confident that we can work together to find a solution. I appreciate your understanding in
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 matter and your efforts to maintain a harmonious living environment for all of us. Thank you for your time, and I look forward to a positive resolution. Best Regards, Shahid
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coherence cohesion
While your letter generally adhered to the logical structure, consider introducing each new point in a separate paragraph to enhance readability and organization. For instance, one paragraph could focus on describing the issue, another on the impact it has on you, and a final one proposing potential solutions or requesting action.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter were polite and appropriate, creating a respectful tone. Keep this approach to maintain a good impression.
task achievement
Your task response was adequate but could be improved by providing more specific examples and suggestions for your neighbor. For example, you could suggest specific times when the dog's barking is most disruptive or offer ideas like seeking a dog trainer or checking if the dog needs more company or exercise.
task achievement
The tone of your letter was suitable and formal, showing respect to your neighbor. Continue to use such a tone in your correspondence to effectively communicate your concerns without causing offense.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • constant barking
  • daily routine
  • sleep disruption
  • training
  • veterinarian
  • bark control devices
  • pet ownership
  • compassionate
  • considerate
  • mutual solution
  • amicably
  • benefits both parties
  • with the best intentions
  • resolving the issue
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