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Band 6

The world is quickly running out of fuels. Some people often believe we should increase petrol prices to control this issue. Do you agree or disagree?

#world #fuels #people #petrol #prices #control
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 using private transport for travelling.
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, the availability of
fuel
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 becomes less. Some
people
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 often believe that in order to solve
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 issue, the authority should charge a high volume of cash for petrol and diesel. In my perspective, I would agree with
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 statement because increasing the
amount
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 of
money
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 can help to reduce the consumption of
fuel
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 and save them. The utilisation of private
vehicles
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 increased because fuels are affordable. In case the government increase the
money
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 for
fuel
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, it could help to minimise the usage of excess
fuel
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. To elaborate, some
people
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 are not able to afford a high
amount
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. They are compelled to pay
money
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 for
vehicles
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 themselves.
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,
people
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 should pay insurance, road tax, repair fee and so on.
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, if the authority charges a high
amount
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 for petrol, it will lead
people
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 to use less
fuel
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.
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, the government can utilise the
money
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 for production or they can buy from another region.
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, there are some other sorts of
vehicles
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 which are not run on
fuel
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.
This
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 type of vehicle needs an electric charge. So,
people
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 who are not likely to pay much
money
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 on
fuel
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 and waste
money
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 will move to electric
vehicles
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.
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 to that,
as a consequence
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 of
this
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 rule which was implemented by the government, some
people
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 depend on public transport
instead
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 of private
vehicles
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. To recapitulate, running out of
fuel
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 can be solved by increasing the
amount
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 of
money
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.
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,
people
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 depend on public transport or electric
vehicles
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. ,
Otherwise
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money
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 from tax which is collected from
fuel
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, can use for the production of petrol.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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