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Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Recently, the problem of what
sources
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 are supposed to provide
support
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 for
artists
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 has been in the limelight in public and has drawn much attention from people. Regarding
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 issue, people have different views. Some people think that
governments
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 should financially
support
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artists
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 more,
while
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 others argue that
alternative
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sources
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 should be offered to them. From my perspective, these two different opinions both have their own benefits. My points of view will be illustrated in two aspects. On one hand,
governments
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 are absolutely supposed to
support
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artists
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. As far as I am concerned, by supporting
artists
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,
governments
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 are able to improve their cultural influence internationally. Because
artists
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such
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 as painters and
musicians
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 are outstanding symbols of countries and the cultural exchange envoys between countries. In order to publicize the country itself,
governments
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 should give more
support
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 to
artists
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.
For instance
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, it is known to all that
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Lang
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 is an excellent pianist in
China
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 and he is the cultural calling card of
China
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.
While
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 performing all over the world, he carries forward the Chinese culture, especially the musical culture, to the world.
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, the audiences and fans who are attracted by
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Lang
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 will have a tendency to know
China
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 , which boosts
China
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’s international influence and is beneficial to the development of
China
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.
Therefore
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,
governments
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 are supposed to
support
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 financially to creative
artists
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.
On the other hand
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, it is necessary for
artists
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 to gain
support
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 from various
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,
such
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 as
artists
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’ own families, their fans and social and cultural organizations. Personally,
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 think that working in art is a little risky because of uncertain salaries and a changeable social environment.
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,
artists
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 are often in a variety of plights.
Furthermore
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, cultivating an excellent artist requires numerous resources.
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,
alternative
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sources
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 are indispensable in the process of fostering an artist.
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, there was an entertainment show about
musicians
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 in
China
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 called Songs in Hearts, which provided an incomparable platform for
musicians
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 to show their musical talent. There is no doubt that without
this
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 platform, these
musicians
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 may never be noticed by the public.
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,
after
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this
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 entertainment show, these
musicians
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 obtained plenty of fans and are more motivated in their careers, which in my opinion, was a win-win behaviour.
To sum up
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,
support
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 should be provided by both
governments
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 and
alternative
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sources
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 because they play different roles in national cultural development.
Governments
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 are supposed to financially
support
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artists
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 because
artists
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 are able to improve the international influence of the country.
Besides
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, other
sources
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also
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 should provide
support
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 in order to foster creative
artists
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 better.
However
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, weighing up both sides of the argument, as discussed earlier, I will conclude by saying that government should be the main force in promoting the career development of
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, and
also
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alternative
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sources
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 should help
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 sometimes necessary.

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