The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.
The graph and table below provide information regarding
healthcare
resources and life
expectancy
in various countries.
It can be seen from the bar graph that Australia, Canada, Netherlands
, Spain, Correct article usage
the Netherlands
United
Kingdom and Correct article usage
the United
United
States have roughly 3 to 4 hospital beds per thousand of the population. Correct article usage
the United
While
Germany has 8 hospital beds per thousand of the population, which is the second highest as illustrated in the graph, Japan
has the highest number of hospital beds, reaching 14 per thousand of the population.
Although
Japan
has the lowest health spending, $2581, compared to the Netherlands and the United States, surprisingly they have the highest average life
expectancy
compared to the other 2, where the average people could live up to 83 years old! Conversely
, United
States Correct article usage
the United
who
has spent the most per person on Correct pronoun usage
which
healthcare
, $6719, unfortunately, has the lowest average life
expectancy
of only 78 years old.
In conclusion, Japan
has the most efficient healthcare
system amongst the other countries, and the heavier spending by other countries on their healthcare
system isn’t fully justified as the life
expectancy
of their average people is still behind the average people living in Japan
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