The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.

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The graph and table below provide information regarding

healthcare

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resources and

life

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expectancy

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in various countries. It can be seen from the bar graph that Australia, Canada,

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, Spain,

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Kingdom and

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States have roughly 3 to 4 hospital beds per thousand of the population.

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Germany has 8 hospital beds per thousand of the population, which is the second highest as illustrated in the graph,

Japan

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has the highest number of hospital beds, reaching 14 per thousand of the population.

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Japan

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has the lowest health spending, $2581, compared to the Netherlands and the United States, surprisingly they have the highest average

life

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expectancy

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compared to the other 2, where the average people could live up to 83 years old!

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States

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has spent the most per person on

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, $6719, unfortunately, has the lowest average

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expectancy

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of only 78 years old. In conclusion,

Japan

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has the most efficient

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system amongst the other countries, and the heavier spending by other countries on their

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system isn’t fully justified as the

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expectancy

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of their average people is still behind the average people living in

Japan

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Topic Vocabulary:

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life expectancy
per capita
modern medical equipment
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accessibility
average lifespan
healthcare policies
government healthcare spending
disparities
developed countries
developing countries
global health inequalities
technological advancements
telemedicine
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health outcomes
public health initiatives
vaccination programs
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The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.

Increasing numbers of workers are suffering from stress and stress-related illnesses. Why is the modern workplace so stressful and what can be done to reduce this problem?

In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that goverments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Climate change is now an accepted threat to our planet but there is not enough political action to control excessive consumerism and pollution. Do you agree?'

The rise of social media has affected personal relatioships and society as a whole. Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweigh the disadvantages ?