Many working people get littel exercise or no exercise either during the worikng day or in their free time and ha health problems as a result. -Why do so many working people not get enought exercise? -What can be done about this problem? Give answer + include any relevant example.

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we live an unhealthy and lazy lifestyle because we use a car so it is not
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ready to eat. Burn less energy and eat much more
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calories
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disappeared
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obesity is growing
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world. On the typical working days the workers,
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students
and pupils get up really early and generally finish their day after 8 hours
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. After their
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they need to do other tasks like go to the supermarket or
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if we see the children they have
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lesson
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after
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school. The time is really late we they arrive
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home and it is logical that they are tied so they haven’t got
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to go to the gym or do some exercise at home. Most of the people in
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free time watch TV and order some food or go to a restaurant or bar where they meet with
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their friends
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haven’t
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2 or 3
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hours
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and extra energy to do some sports.
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years ago I saw that
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financial jobs have asked their employees to have a good-looking appearance so the companies have been supporting their workers and developed a gym
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office building. In my opinion that it is a great
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because they can do
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exercise
whenever they want and after the sport they will have
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better productivity so it is
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to both
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.
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the gyms
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to organise
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day when
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people can try
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group
classes,
also
there are
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trainers
who
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videos
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workouts
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. These opportunities
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to save time and
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help
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motivation.
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, is it a real problem but luckily we have a
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alternative ways to find the solution and change our lifestyle. It is important to have a
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diet and have an active life between
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10 or 11 hours of sitting and working.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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