The bar chart shows the number of visitors to four London museums. Interpret the information as given in the chart and write what you perceive in 150 words.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to four London

museums. Interpret the information as given in the chart and write

what you perceive in 150 words.
The bar graph illustrates the number of
tourists
in different months in London
museums
.
Overall
, in London , the
British
Museum
was very famous and the figure of visitors picks in August.
However
, the National
Museum
was less popular in the
overall
months.
To begin
with, in June month, around 400000 people visited .History,
British
and Science gallery .
While
,
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only 200000
tourists
visited the National
Museum
.
Similarly
, in July few people liked to visit National art gallery rather than others. On contrary, the popularity of
British
museums
increased dramatically from 400000 to 700000 which was
also
the highest number of
tourists
in
this
museum
in August month.
In addition
, the History gallery stands in the second highest position with 600000 visitors.
Whereas
, National
Museum
and Science
Museum
showed around 400000 foreigners.
Moreover
, in the month of September, people decreased to visit all
museums
.The figure showed the
British
Museum
was a higher number of
tourists
and the science
museums
were less crowded.
Furthermore
,
at the end
of the year , the
British
Museum
was famous
while
other
museums
were less than 300000 visitors visit.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, museums, british, museum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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