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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your county to live or study abroad ?

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Over the
last
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different kind of
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 and plan for higher study abroad. In
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 essay, I will explore the pros and cons of choosing another nation for higher
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Firstly
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, Students and individuals want to go
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 study abroad and take professional
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 there, it is becoming normal in the new generation, Pupils can learn so many new things over there like lifestyle, communicate with the different kinds of language and observe
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daily routine, they
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 get a huge number of skill benefits.
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, enhance
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the free medical health services, get scholarships
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professional courses, become
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financially independent and they can earn money by doing part-time jobs during their studies and can pay rent and college fees
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 fees from their parents. One of the major plus points is after studying they are ready for an international job offer and develop their skill in other nations.
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, there are a lot of challenges you might face once you arrive in an unfamiliar location. First and foremost, there is a language barrier. We are all very comfortable in our native language, but in another country, it may be difficult to understand the citizens' way of speaking. The major problem is that studying abroad is expensive compared to our nation's
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middle class
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 families cannot afford it sometimes. People who never stay alone or without their parents may become ill at home. In conclusion, Studying abroad is sometimes really difficult, but it would be a really new experience to develop skills. In
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split of the fact that it might be interesting and exploring the world would be good for the new generation
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 they become independent easily.
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