the diagram below shows the production of olive oil

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diagram illustrates the manufacture of olive oil. It is clear from the graph that the procedure undergoes seven stages.

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the procedure the

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start with collected olives.

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stage, they put it in cold water to be rinsed after that it is going through the belt to be sorted, and

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start with smashing olive grains.

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, in

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phase, it is created either olive paste or olive stones.

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, after these steps, the production is collected in bags with holes.

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to get it to be pressed, before getting the products into storage the oil that has been extracted, water gets separated from it.

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, it is will be ready for distribution. Tomsum up, we could say that

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process starts with picking the olive beads to make them into paste or stones which need seven phases to be ready for sale.

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Harvesting
Ripe
Sorting
Crushing
Paste
Grinding stones
Steel blades
Pressing
Extraction
Liquids
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Settle
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Distribution
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the diagram below shows the production of olive oil

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as sahara desserts or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists to visit such places?

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