You and your family have just rented an apartment and one or two problems occurred. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter • introduce yourself • describe the problems • what you would like him/her to do.

Dear Mr Anderson, I am writing
this
letter to complain about the substandard facility that me and my family are facing after renting your
apartment
from
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the
last
1 month. I Jonathan Grey, and my family of 4 members have been tenants of your
apartment
since
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for a few weeks. The address for the same is F.1045, first floor, new hill housing, south bay area. I and my wife are software developers and we have 2 children, aged 3 and 5 years, who go to school. Me and my wife work at a software company. The problem with accommodation started 3 weeks back when the water heater in the bathroom broke and stopped functioning
in
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full capacity. We are
also
facing
issues
with the ventilation system that provides inefficient heating in the living space. As you know winters are quite chilly in
this
area and
due to
cold weather, my family, especially my toddlers are facing health
issues
due to
these inefficient systems in our accommodation.
While
signing the agreement papers for
this
apartment
we were ensured for these basic facilities. I trust you can empathize with our situation. I expect you to ask the utility manager of
this
apartment
to fix these
issues
without delay. I
also
expect you to reprimand the utility manager, as even after addressing these
issues
numerous times he did not have the courtesy to show up and restore the facilities. I am looking forward
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your reply. Yours sincerely, Jonathan grey.
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structure
Although your letter is well-written, you might want to consider breaking down the problems into separate paragraphs for better clarity.
detail
Ensure consistency in providing details about your situation for a stronger argument and clearer understanding.
tone
Your letter has a polite tone and you clearly state your concerns and expectations, which is essential in formal communication.
structure
Your introduction and conclusion are effectively structured, providing a good opening and closing to your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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