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Providing financial aid to the poor can increase poverty. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#aid #poverty
Nowadays, there is an argument that the main
reason
 behind
poverty
 is the financial aid which is provided to poor
people
. In my opinion, except in certain cases, I largely disagree with the notion because of false statements
besides
this
 corruption. First and foremost, some
people
 including me support the thought that financial aids given to poor
people
 are not fully responsible for the
poverty
 in the nation because not every poor person takes advantage of the government. To be more specific, affluent
people
also
 fill out forms by showing fake documents that they enjoy the facilities given by governing authorities to the poor
people
. To epitomise the Times published in 2020, 68% of
people
 come under the
poverty
 line, but in the accounts of authorities 80% spent on poor
people
.
Hence
, affects the
budget
 by providing fake documents. Moving on, another worth mentioning point is an increase in the corruption rate mostly at a higher level.
This
 is because, some politicians and government job holders show in their accounts that they donate particular amounts to a specific group, despite putting these grants in their pockets.
As a consequence
,
budget
 minimising day by day and
poverty
 escalating.
For example
, Tim Cook, from Sheffield Hallam University in the UK, conducted research yesteryear and conclude that only the poor populations were blamed for lowering the
budget
 rather than inspecting the main
reason
. Shifting to another aspect, another school of thought opposes the concept of poor
people
 are the main
reason
 for
poverty
 and disturbing the
budget
. As they perhaps that
this
 is the only responsibility of the government to fulfil the basic necessity of the citizens and
this
 strengthens their viewpoint which cannot be ignored. In conclusion, the community find it hard to reach a consensus that the main
reason
 behind
poverty
.
Although
 few
people
 blame the poor
people
, I tend to believe that scores of other reasons like not only fake documents provided by the rich communities but
also
 corruptions are mainly responsible.
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